Tuesday, 27 August 2013

Milla and Brina's Short Story

The House at the end of the street

After falling off a swing when she was young Kelly-Ann has been utterly demented. At the age of 13 and the weight of 47kgs Kelly-Ann’s madness became worse!
While her parents snooze on a thunderous winters night Kelly-Ann selects the two most biggest and deadly weapons in the house. Knives! The old floor boards under Kelly-Ann’s feet creek and moan as she strides towards her parents with her long brown hanging over her eyes. Her dirty white night gown flows behind her as she walks.
Suddenly she pounces onto her parent’s bed landing perfectly in between them. After the count of three the knives enter her parent’s hearts in perfect sync. The shrill sounds of screams filled the room as thick red blood pours out of their hearts, onto the pristine white sheets. Her parent’s dead bodies turned as white as sheep’s wool and as floppy as noodles.
That very night Kelly-Ann got hold of her murdered father’s chainsaw. Blood splattered everywhere as she chopped her parent’s cold white bodies over her deceased dog’s grave. The last thing Kelly-Ann did that night (Friday 13th August) was hanging herself off her parents balcony.
Two weeks later family and friends gathered with Kelly-Ann’s brother Jacob to grieve.  Kelly-Ann, now an alarming ghost living in the dark cellar of Jacobs’s house wasn’t pleased to see such a big crowd. She had a plan…
As family members were weeping like a fresh deep cut on your leg, all of a sudden she swooped into the room of guests. Doors started opening and slamming, glass started shattering, blood was being drawn all the while screams fulfilled the room. Jacob hid in a cupboards shaking with fear until it was only himself and his terrified thirteen year old cousin Ethan left breathing.
Jacob looked through a gap in the cupboard horrified to see Ethan in the process of being murded. Instead of arm he saw a waterfall of blood and his eye was missing. A cross of blood appeared over his small heart and he fell to the ground dead. The room was mottled in blood.
Jacob noticed his ghostly sister walking towards him. Suddenly the cupboard doors flews open yet another scream filled the room.
‘Why did you kill everyone” cried Jacob after a while
“I lonely in hell” replied the ghost “if you tie this rope around your neck and jump we can be friends in hell.”
She handed him the rope.
Although Kelly-Ann had offered she tied the rope around his neck and pushed him off the balcony. His death was quick but painful.
To this day the rope still hangs in exactly the same place he died. Kelly-Ann and Jacob are now friends in hell and enjoy making unseen murders. Every day when the kids do the paper run they sprint past the house. The house known as the house at the end of the street.

By Milla and Brina


2 comments:

  1. Vocabulary - uses a variety of precise words which add interesting and visual information.

    Ideas - ideas are complex and elaborated.

    Punctuation - correct use of punctuation and sentences - example: excellent use of commas and direct speech.

    Well done!
    by Lydia and Rene

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  2. Well done Lydia and Rene for pointing out areas from the Writing Rubric that Milla and Brina have achieved. Do you have any comments and suggestions on what they could have done to make some improvements? Mrs S!

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