The House at the end of the street
After falling off a swing when she was young Kelly-Ann has
been utterly demented. At the age of 13 and the weight of 47kgs Kelly-Ann’s
madness became worse!
While her parents snooze on a thunderous winters night
Kelly-Ann selects the two most biggest and deadly weapons in the house. Knives!
The old floor boards under Kelly-Ann’s feet creek and moan as she strides
towards her parents with her long brown hanging over her eyes. Her dirty white
night gown flows behind her as she walks.
Suddenly she pounces onto her parent’s bed landing perfectly
in between them. After the count of three the knives enter her parent’s hearts
in perfect sync. The shrill sounds of screams filled the room as thick red
blood pours out of their hearts, onto the pristine white sheets. Her parent’s
dead bodies turned as white as sheep’s wool and as floppy as noodles.
That very night Kelly-Ann got hold of her murdered father’s
chainsaw. Blood splattered everywhere as she chopped her parent’s cold white
bodies over her deceased dog’s grave. The last thing Kelly-Ann did that night
(Friday 13th August) was hanging herself off her parents balcony.
Two weeks later family and friends gathered with Kelly-Ann’s
brother Jacob to grieve. Kelly-Ann, now
an alarming ghost living in the dark cellar of Jacobs’s house wasn’t pleased to
see such a big crowd. She had a plan…
As family members were weeping like a fresh deep cut on your
leg, all of a sudden she swooped into the room of guests. Doors started opening
and slamming, glass started shattering, blood was being drawn all the while
screams fulfilled the room. Jacob hid in a cupboards shaking with fear until it
was only himself and his terrified thirteen year old cousin Ethan left
breathing.
Jacob looked through a gap in the cupboard horrified to see
Ethan in the process of being murded. Instead of arm he saw a waterfall of
blood and his eye was missing. A cross of blood appeared over his small heart
and he fell to the ground dead. The room was mottled in blood.
Jacob noticed his ghostly sister walking towards him.
Suddenly the cupboard doors flews open yet another scream filled the room.
‘Why did you kill everyone” cried Jacob after a while
“I lonely in hell” replied the ghost “if you tie this rope
around your neck and jump we can be friends in hell.”
She handed him the rope.
Although Kelly-Ann had offered she tied the rope around his
neck and pushed him off the balcony. His death was quick but painful.
To this day the rope still hangs in exactly the same place
he died. Kelly-Ann and Jacob are now friends in hell and enjoy making unseen
murders. Every day when the kids do the paper run they sprint past the house.
The house known as the house at the end of the street.
By Milla and Brina
Vocabulary - uses a variety of precise words which add interesting and visual information.
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Punctuation - correct use of punctuation and sentences - example: excellent use of commas and direct speech.
Well done!
by Lydia and Rene
Well done Lydia and Rene for pointing out areas from the Writing Rubric that Milla and Brina have achieved. Do you have any comments and suggestions on what they could have done to make some improvements? Mrs S!
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